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Need grammatical help from a native english speaker

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	SpaceFreakMicha
	Jesus-Freak

Registered: March 13, 2007

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Posted:

Well, I thought I could get help on tumblr and twitter where I follow (and being followed) young writers, but no one seems to care. Time to ask the loyal movie freaks who never disappoint...

I wrote a little haiku but I'm not sure which second verse is correct or "better" english:

Marvellous blossoms
a) you form with every year OR b) you are carrying each year
and sweeter fruits, too

Thanks in advance!

	mediadogg
	Aim high. Ride the wind.

Registered: March 18, 2007

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	SpaceFreakMicha
	Jesus-Freak

Registered: March 13, 2007

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Thanks mediadogg, much appreciated!

	Eagle
	Registered: Oct 31, 2001

Registered: March 15, 2007

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Posted:

I agree with mediadogg...the grammar with a) is better

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	DJ Doena
	Registered: May 1, 2002

Registered: March 14, 2007

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But Micha, remember: You can write about parkways and flowers, but don't try to appreciate women in your poems, because that's sexist!

(For those who didn't get that "joke": https://www.thelocal.de/20180124/berlin-university-outrages-artist-by-erasing-his-poetry-over-sexism-allegation)

Karsten
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	SpaceFreakMicha
	Jesus-Freak

Registered: March 13, 2007

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Posted:

Thanks Eagle & DJ Doena!

And Doena: Did I write about a woman? Or a tree?

	dee1959jay

Registered: March 19, 2007

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Posted:

Quoting DJ Doena:

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(For those who didn't get that "joke": https://www.thelocal.de/20180124/berlin-university-outrages-artist-by-erasing-his-poetry-over-sexism-allegation)

Copying the web address works, clicking the link does not.

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